Tuesday, April 26, 2011

Part III: thesis and outline

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PZkeMVW6RT6_ddGYSL92Levw6xEyTNDUWGaHx3z78sQ/edit?hl=en&authkey=CKa82f8G

1 comment:

  1. I really like the ideas you are planning to include in your first body paragraph- Asian men today asserting their masculinity with tattoos and pimped out cars, both of which are intended to impress women. But in your second body paragraph, are you referring to the past, when Asian men were forced into service/domestic/'feminine' jobs? Or does your research indicate Asian men are still forced to enter these types of jobs which emasculate them? Based on your body paragraph ideas, I would suggest that you rephrase your thesis. You seem to be making an interesting point about Asian masculinity, emasculation and male-female relationships. Lastly, do not list the databases you consulted for research purposes in your introduction. This outline looks good and I'm looking forward to reading your first draft :)

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